Gang-related activity raises concerns

BY GLENN SMITH

WALTERBORO — The gang member leaned into the crowded nightclub and beckoned to Donald Green to join him outside. The gang member wasn't there to talk, debate or ponder what would come next. Green barely had time to taste the night air before the first bullet slammed into his body.

If I have to read a led two or three times in order to understand it, its not a good lede. Like this one for example. I give it kudos for the Shakespeare-like intro where there is a death or a fight right away, but still this headline is a mess. Our antagonist is nameless, which probably means he wasn't caught. So automatically we have a character to hate whom we have no idea who he is, but we do question if he talks at all. Then our protagonist dies within the first paragraph. The sad thing is we never got to attach ourselves to this character. There wasn't any development, other than that he likes tasting night air. This is actually becoming a Hitchcock movie. This is an obvious attempt from Gary to write his screenplay while writing his story. This kind of killing two birds with one stone is becoming popular.


Also, the headline is a little too easy. Has gang related activity ever been pushed under the rug? Or has anyone ever uttered, "Oh thugs will be thugs." Let's try again Gary.